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[Christopher John]

Congradulations!

You found your new home

Don't Settle for anything less than the best.

Your Mortgage Compant should get you the loan that will protect you and your familys biggest investment and your future.

Our job & passion is to get you this loan.

100% free mortgage review & consultation will give you the confidence you'll need when making this very important descision



What do you think?

Thanks Chris

[JL Melvin]

Hey Chris -

Off the bat - Congradulations is spelled - Congratulations

Also - Mortgage Compant should be Company

Who is your target market? I'm a little confused. Is it new home owners, home seekers, etc.?

Your offer is compelling, but it's at the bottom. Bring it up to the top - highlight it...

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Just shooting off the cuff with a rough assessment.

Press on to Success!

Jeff

[Christopher John]

Thanks Jeff,

I am new at this and willing to take all the help I can get.

Pressing on,

Chris